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  • 8 May 2009 at 04:06 #10359
    Pirkid
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    How tired I am of this unbearable distance between us.
    How I long, for the toll, of the recess bell.
    To see you when, you do not see me.
    Cliche forgiven, only time can tell.

    Have you forgotten me? Grown mindless of me?

    Tell me I am not writing into an abyss,
    or is that what will become of this?
    I made a wish, hoping to make sure,
    that was that she would need the same from me, as I do from her.

    All I want, is for you to find me.

    And I wait.

    Damnit, if I submitted this on time..
    Dee, rate it anyways. >< I did it quick.

    8 May 2009 at 04:20 #10360
    dee32693
    Participant

    8.5/10

    the last line in the second stanza is kind of weird. Also the flow of either of the two stanzas seems on different wavelengths. I get both and otherwise, it rocks. Great job! ^^ Feel free to argue your point on wether i should raise the bar ;O

    Teach YOU not to be late! >O

    9 May 2009 at 03:45 #10382
    Pirkid
    Participant

    xD

    Not my fault..

    9 May 2009 at 18:30 #10390
    David
    Participant

    lol not his falt, dont blame him 4 dat mistaek

    he subgmiite and dats wut counts

    9 May 2009 at 18:41 #10392
    Pirkid
    Participant

    kthx

    9 May 2009 at 18:42 #10394
    David
    Participant

    ino im jus dryin 2 halp

    i halp u and i be gud xicizen i lek dis lul

    9 May 2009 at 19:46 #10403
    dee32693
    Participant

    *throws pie at you both*

    The least you could do is use grammar properly in this thread!!! >O

    9 May 2009 at 19:56 #10405
    Pirkid
    Participant

    i tinks dee is rght..out off all treads, tis 1 sould has propar gramar

    9 May 2009 at 20:04 #10407
    dee32693
    Participant

    *throws pie at you*

    Eat pie nubcake >O looololol get it? i threw a PIE cause you’rer a nubCAKE roflmaaoo *fail @ joke*

    9 May 2009 at 20:25 #10409
    FunnyFroggy
    Participant

    You know, they’re still using proper grammar.

    dey juzt nut speell koreklee.

    9 May 2009 at 22:26 #10423
    David
    Participant

    LOL, Froggy totally owned Dee in one shot. 😉

    9 May 2009 at 23:02 #10424
    Lithium
    Participant

    Oooh, I wanna get involved in this.

    9 May 2009 at 23:44 #10427
    David
    Participant

    Can we start? 🙁

    10 May 2009 at 01:09 #10429
    Nass
    Participant

    k fine.

    You can start nao.

    No topic. Anything u want.

    Uhh

    Yeah.

    Start pl0x.

    10 May 2009 at 02:17 #10438
    David
    Participant

    Lithium is so going to win…

    Twilight, a period,
    squeezed in between
    Sunrise and Dawn,
    Yet so serene,
    To be in.

    The Sun’s not quite up,
    The Moon’s not quite down,
    The couple’s together,
    Naught with a frown,
    On faces.

    The feeling’s too magical,
    Too surreal, too extreme,
    Perhaps we can’t be rational,
    When we think about us,
    Together.

    Let’s flutter away,
    Rise above high,
    Everyone else,
    Into the sky,
    to Twilight.

    Note: Last verse of every stanza is three syllables. Rhyming scheme proceeds as ABCBD. Written off the top of my head in 5 minutes. 🙂

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